Saturday, February 5, 2011

Haiku Series (published in parts): Poems on the Seeing an Old Man

In the filtered sunlight still
strong squints the old man
He will walk before he dies.


  1. ok

    I really don't tend to like haikus (correct pluralization?), but I actually like these. I like the idea of writing them as a series, and I like what seems to be the structure of the first two lines being descriptive and the last line being a poignant and ironic statement about what is described before.

  2. Glad you like it. I don't generally like Haiku (proper plural - though if you really want to go Japanese, the plural is actually just a repetition (which is more equivalent to saying many - so many haiku would be haiku haiku.) either but I'm kind of liking this series as well. I suspect you may also be able to pick out the religious reference as the series goes on.